Here is the feedback for my paper, it should be revised accordingly
Here are my suggestions for further improvement:
I recommend restructuring your document to strengthen your argument. Begin with an introduction that incorporates your reflections, followed by a comprehensive presentation of your personal development plan. This communicates to the readers that you have critically reflected of your previous attempt and illustrates your commitment to improvement if granted another opportunity by the examination committee.
In your reflections, I would also make explicit reference to additional supporting documents, which can be included as an addendum. I would also consider renaming the section currently labeled “feedback from observers” to “recommendation letters.” This adjustment allows you to request people to write a personalized recommendation letter under their name with their signature and contact details, giving more credibility and persuasiveness than a mere quote.